Thanks for stopping by to check out my writing! This week I am bringing you my current WIP. It is from a book that I titled, "The Willow". Today's excerpt is a part of the Weekend Writing Warriors meme (also known as 8 Sentence Sunday).
In this snippet, Juliana is waiting on her abusive, alcoholic fiancé James to come home for their New Year's celebration she had planned. He had promised her they would celebrate together, but as usual he has ruined her plans.
"With
every minute that passed, my heart sank deeper into my chest. He
should have been back by now. I do not know why I trusted him when he
said he would come home in time. I knew that I shouldn't be surprised. The hands
on the clock quickly turned to midnight. I rang in the New Year
alone, sitting on my love seat watching as the happy couples filled
the television screen with their overly long make out sessions. I put
a noise maker to my mouth and slowly blew into it. The sound it
emitted was the saddest, most pathetic noise I had ever heard."
Again, thank you for stopping by. Your support is greatly appreciated.
- Ashley E. Perry
Oh, how sad for her! Nice 8.
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DeleteI think it's time for new year resolution. Now is it what she is going to think too? I'm really looking forward to what comes next.
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DeleteOh man, what a sucky New Year! Well done, I really felt this one.
ReplyDeleteThank you, J.Rose.
DeleteLove the "sad" sound of the noisemaker. Nice touch.
ReplyDeleteGlad you like it, Cara. Thank you.
DeleteYep. Time to move on. Could picture the scene perfectly:)
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, Eleri.
DeleteYou captured the moment well. I pictured it , poor girl!
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Thanks so much, Summer.
DeleteI love the last sentence. It's a great snippet. Well done!
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it, Jess. :D
DeleteOh, I really feel for her there.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by and checking it out. :D
DeleteThat's so sad! Dump him, girl...you can do better!
ReplyDeleteShe sure can! ;D
DeleteThe emotion is so well portrayed :-( I HOPE she takes stock of the situation and does something before the next New Year's alone. Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteOh yes! ;P Thank you, Veronica.
Deletealone...very nice!
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DeleteOh that poor girl. I say dump the jerk and move on. Very nice portrayal of her loneliness, LOVED the last line.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it, Isabella. :)
DeleteOuch! great snippet. Definitely gives us a sense of how she's feeling
ReplyDeleteThanks, Shannyn.
DeleteThat is so sad and good on you for making me feel that.
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Thank you, Cindy.
DeleteHow very poignant and sad. Good snippet!
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